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Hexapod Haiku 2011 – honorable mention, poets under 13

I’ve been slow to announce the honorable mention entries from this year’s Hexapod Haiku Challenge, mainly because we had a fairly large number of high quality poems. Here are five honorable mentions (in no particular order) from poets under the age of 13 that resonated with the judges:

Dragonfly are big time fly’s
They can fly through the night skytime
all through the night time

Brecannna Berrios
Baltimore, MD

Judges’ comments: We liked the iterations of «fly» and «night,» which were clever and euphonious. The invention of «skytime» was intriguing.

Scarab

Sacred in days long past,
The tiny bug that charted the great sun’s path,
The symbol of life and renewal,
The little jewel-like bugs that both hid and duel.

Evelyn Barone
Saylorsburg, PA

Judges’ comments: We loved the symbolic connection of the lowly insect (one that, in fact, lives in the waste of other animals) to a large, majestic, god-like figure. The sun’s path is a literal metaphor for time and renewal. The time shift in line three (i.e., «hid») was clever.

Mantis

Named for an action of peace to which it is ill sented,
The master of speed and deception;
Both a statue and an arrow,
The only to be born and die in a position of both serenity and chaos.

Evelyn Barone,
Saylorsburg, PA

Judges’ comments: The «sented» in line one read to us as a clever nonce – i.e., Jabberwocky-esque word that is simultaneously nonsensical and meaningful. It sets the tone for an epic dreamscape, instantiated in lines two and three. Wonderful.

Ants

Ants are coming now.
When the ants come marching in,
Marching in millions.

Lauren Gehrig
Chapel Hill, NC

Judges’ comments: We can hear the army marching, serious, intimidating, and yet melodic and reminiscent of that spiritual / jazz tune When the Saints Go Marching In. A very nice effect.

Bees

I saw a big fat bee
makeing good yummy honey
on a little rose

Iyanna Reeves,
Baltimore, MD

Judges’ comments: Another wonderful portrait of an important insect. Bees, though capable of inflicting painful stings, also make delicious honey and facilitate the pollination of beautiful flowers. We loved this sweet – literally and figuratively – scene.

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